Echo090

Hello mah friend. Good job on this piece. This is my rusty review, forgive me for this. 1.) I often find myself detached from the story because of how unrealistic ...

Hi. So let's get on with this. Just decided to return to YWS after some years, so I'll be rusty. Eh, I've always been rusty, but it's up to you ...

On second though , you probably shouldn't make a donation like that in honor of someone who didn't even put up a fight. thought I'm Not Asking You To Cry ...

A Thousand Dancing Kites is a story lacking for words, but even without fine sentences, it nevertheless can convey what the story is really is. It is a story you ...

Excitement is a simple excerpt about how one feels, using a metaphorical story of real life to convey what excitement means. It is simple but the message or rather expression ...

I ran to grab it, but the more I ran and ran, I never got closer. Something's wrong with the underlined word. I think you mean: I ran to grab ...

First of all, with the story changed, I think the title has became less effective. But other than that, I'm impressed. Your writing style, though simple, was good enough. And ...

This for me is how it should been written. Not sure if I'm really correct though. In my life I have driven past dozens, possibly even hundreds , of car ...

I really found this interesting. Such strong characters, fine dialogues, but still I still need to crticize it. Firstly, possesive forms were not used. That is just against English grammar ...

You seems to be very depress. If this poem is ever based from reality, then I am so sorry for you. The poem was very touching. Easy to read but ...

VIDEO SHOP GUY: A small independent video shop opened up across the road from my house, owned by a nice 30 something man and his mum. I was about seven ...

It was kind of flat, nothing made it impressive but it had things that made in unsatisfying. "I stare through the wind and water at the melting colors of parked ...

Overall, I think I do like it. Especially the part where you describe her eyes- my favorite. But one thing you missed was clarity. It was like half of the ...

I like the poem, so emotional. But here are some things that turned me off. “I see the lights dear, I believe it is my time To go home to ...

Well for me, if the quote is quite obvious of who is telling it. Remove the I said or he said. But only do this if there are no additional ...