ELven-Maiden

Awesome! It was a little fast for me to keep up, and I wanted a little more action between the man and Tamia. Slightly disappointing when they just stop. Add ...

Dang. I read it too fast. Now I have to wait until the next chapter, lol! A little awkward worrding here and there. It didn't seem like a story; it ...

Don't tell Robert this. He'll light the teabag on fire and then some :O Anyway. I thought this was really cool. The ending, I thought, was very good. [Quote: Snoink ...

FIrst of all, I know next to nothing about gymnastics. when you talk about kips and casts, I'm lost. of course, the real important thing is the giants that you ...

ooh...revenge! Cool! Basically, all I can do is echo the others. I'd like a bit more description on the characters, but the scenery is fine. I could see the battle ...

Ooh...I'm excited to see how this one turns out! I really liked this. keep it up! But why is she suddenly scared of the man? by your descriptions, I like ...

I agree with everyone else above me. I liked your ideas of magic. they're good and beliveable. Quote: His lips twisted in a cruel little smile and he stepped over ...

interesting. i especially liked the begining. however, the descriptions of the characters sort of stopped the flow of the story. if they do that, your reader will skip it to ...

I like it! it reminds me of one of my favorite quotes: "Our weaknesses are like dogs; if we run from them, they chase after us. if you walk towards ...

It's really cool, But it looks like you rushed to write this. You should build up the suspician that it isn't Like jason to fight. Elena doesn't seem to realize ...