ELven-Maiden

XD pigeons. i hate pigeons. Send them to Africa for all I care. XD lol jk. Only one thing to say: I have no clue where Anaheim is, so I ...

Her father opened the front door and said, “Oh, Christian! What a nice surprise! Although I was suspecting you would return!” Like I said, wonderful to lead me down the ...

Christian shook his head, and lied back down. He discovered that his pillow was soaking wet from tears. Christian wiped his eyes and saw his father. His heart stopped and ...

"Not only was I robbed, oh no, my beautiful wife and two children were victims in the robbers killing spree. I see you are surprised. Yes, well, I had two ...

The next day, Christian went to school, and did not mention anything about Krobeth. He didn’t exactly know why he did; he just didn’t feel right about talking to anyone ...

I agree with the others: too much telling. It does seem a little cliched, but if you look at my stories, you'll find cliches all over the place. Cliches aren't ...

I have one thing to say: John was a football jock. He was tall, dark and muscular. John flexed as he approached the group of giggling girls. John was obviously ...

OMG!! you didn't reveiw anything first! :smt012 go reveiw 2 pieces of work now! :smt079 But, anyway, down to the crit. Style's good. I could've sworn your brother wrote this. ...

Well, that sucks. I've read all the other chapters and will crit them, I promise. Man, I used to like Christian. Why do all the cute guys turn bad? XD ...

Dude, this is awesome! He ran his fingers through his long, golden hair comma splice. It should be a period. W hat was it? Aronn drew his sword, something did ...

Twit beat me to all the grammar mistakes, so I won't make you go through that again XD I personally hate it when that happens, but it's what makes me ...

Ah, the story of Perseus! One of my favorites! The only thing I have to say is about the part where Acrisius trhows them into the sea. The way you ...

I liked it. Despite how long it was, though, it moved really slow. Acelin reached out and touched the cold, smooth surface of the golden egg. She watched in astonishment ...

Nice work of Flash Fiction. I was rather impressed. however, I didn't really feel your character's fear or pain or whatever else you are trying to make me feel. Also, ...

heylo! There is only two things I have to say: When Eol's house blew up, I could tell youwere trying to build up some tension, but the scene went by ...