Duskglimmer

I like the descriptions at the beginning of this piece and how you eased us into the idea of her not actually being there. At first I thought that he ...

Hey, author13! I read this through twice start to finish and here's what struck me: the dialogue is incredibly forced. Dialogue is one of the hardest things to write in ...

I'm gonna start off by welcoming you to the site! It's always nice to get new members and we love seeing new work on the forums. If you wander over ...

I gotta learn to check these literary forums more often. If you hadn't put this in your blog, Hunter, I would have missed it all together. But this is me, ...

"Can anybody tell me why there is a mech wandering around that's from a stupid video game?" Snoink said. "Maybe it's lost," Dusky said. "We should help it find out ...

I liked it. I do have to say, that I agree about choosing a different familiar than a panther. The first thing that I thought of when I read it ...

Same for me, Snoink. I really like Tamora Pierce, but The Immortal's Quartet was not my favorite. I'm not quite sure what I would have done in her shoes, but ...

*blinks rapidly* Oh... my... cow... A side of me I never knew! A side of me that scares me emensely! A side of me that... I want to smack upside ...

Have I told you how much you rock my socks today, Princess Arieda? Well, you do. This made my day. My biggest issue is with this section: “It’s nothing.” “I’ll ...

This was really enjoyable. However, I did have a few comments: 1) The idea of Colin forgetting his date with Alice after having a crush on her for a year ...

*laughs* This was definately amusing, Dono. I liked it, although I have to admit that I could have done without the Belgian love slave. That's just my personal preferences though. ...

*practically dies laughing* I think I'm in love with this. It was so amusing and you protrayed all the letters so wonderfully. I especially liked that you have them different ...

I have to admit, it seemed somewhat contrived to me that this would all happen because he was so nervous about proposing to her. I mean, it was cute and ...

I, too, am very confused as to why you put it up if you didn't want it read. And just for the record, I actually obeyed the title's instructions every ...

Well, then... allow me to say "PLEASE NOVELIZE THIS!" I felt bad about coming in here and complaining after people said they liked it so much, but it feels a ...