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Zan: Thanks for the critique. I can always count on you for helpful advice. Master Yoda: Coming from you, that is a very high compliment. You've seriously just boosted my ...

Alright guys, thanks for the reviews. Greatly appreciated. Here is the first chapter. I decided to post them all in the same thread: Chapter One Noora (Everett, Washington, 2009) Green. ...

Zan - Thanks for the critique. You always encourage me. Carly - I appreciate you taking the time to read this. Thank you for telling me to put this back ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys. I really appreciate it, and I'll try to return the favor soon. Alex: For your first review, that was a very good one. Thank you ...

Thanks Anna, you made some points I didn't even think of. Lol, and yes, Peter swears naturally more than Clover, so that's probably why you weren't used to it. I'll ...

Thanks a ton for your comments guys. But...*sigh* I don't think this chapter deserves your praise. I threw it together last minute in a hurry...I don't think it's as good ...

Thanks Rubin! Unfortunately, I'm working on another project right now so I haven't written this story yet. The story I'm writing right now is called Clover's Curse. The characters in ...

Sue and Sibohan are probably the most 2 dimensional because my understanding of the female mind is somewhat limited. That's okay, this is a typical flaw in most males :D ...

I enjoy your structured writing style. This story has great potential You do tend to use a lot of commas. Proof read it to make sure there aren't too many. ...

Thanks for all the critiques, guys! They're really encouraging. Hugs and kisses. Ankhirke and Zan, I totally agree with you guys, I totally hate that last sentence. I was pretty ...

Another amazing chapter, Zan. You're on a roll! Some good action you got goin' on, and the drama is runnin' wild. There are a few things I should adress, though. ...

Omg- this is brilliant!

If you paired this with the right tune, you could have a good song.

Night Mistress: Yes, I read the actual thing. I didn't find too many things wrong with it, just that the introduction had a lot of hers and shes. It's a ...

I say skip straight to the dialogue.