Dragongirl

Alrighty, Dragongirl here for a review. :) I have not read the first chapter of this so if I make any comments out of ignorance feel free to pay them ...

Well I am going to just jumping in. I have not read your previous chapters but I will try to do my best to review this one. First of this ...

Karlax Interesting, this reminds me a bit of the Supernatural TV show. Or at least one of the character from the show, Castiel. Have you seen it? I thought this ...

Hey Timmyjake I've seen you around YWS and you seem like a pretty cool dude so I figured I would check out some of your stuff! Boy, you got skills!!! ...

Okay, right off the bat I am going to say I am a stickler for happy ends or at least some semblance of a happy end. I think it is ...

Well, first off, I must say lovely world building here. This is quite the chuck of writing to go over but I will give it my best shot. To begin ...

"You are humans without the humanity!" I love that line. I found your poem to be thought provoking as well as moving. I liked how you took the side of ...

Here to review, As far as first chapters go, I wouldn't call this one exactly riveting. Since this is a pretty short chapter there isn't a ton I can say ...

Sylar, As you said this is a exert form a lengthier story so I did feel a little disoriented diving into this 'chapter'. That being said, I found the action ...

So I haven't read you other chapters but I but I thought I might drop in and give this chapter a quick review. First off I want to say that ...

Hello Abhilash! So I liked this. Just like the rest of us on here, there are a few places you could improve but for the most part I really liked ...

This is really short. Yes, I know I am stating the obvious, sorry. ;) So this is a nice few lines. It could almost be lyrics to a song. I ...

Hey, Dragongirl here! So first off this is interesting. I am very curious to see where you will go with this. I find the mix of modern day and unique ...

Hey, So I am not sure what to think about this. Is it a poem, or is it a short story? You start this out with a lot of lovey ...

Gyp-Z, Wow!!! Color me amazed. I was so into this. I kept thinking 'I hope this doesn't end soon'. I really like your characters and setting. Your descriptions of the ...