Derek

I just wanted to request a quote by quote or document review if you cant do either of those that is fine but quote and documents help me improve it ...

Okay i understand all of what you saying i've said this once before i dont want to give away everything in the first chapter i wanna leave some mystery with ...

Sorry about the poll it wont go away!?!?!

I like your poetry....intreging...i dont like poetry so this is wierd i'm going to have to keep watching out when you post some poetry loved it!!! Rating A !!! (^_^)

Short i like short it was very good quick ending is great i think you do a fine job Suz didn't even no you did poetry

Pengie i didn't know you did poetry wow this is pretty cool i love boxes there so square and simple..... ok sorry i give it A (^_^)

Suddenly.....i'm sad which means it works i guess nice i love it no wait should i hate it? i dont know you got me all confuzzeled!

ha i liked it it's was quiet long for my taste but pay that no mind as i don't enjoy poetry that much but i did like this liked the ...

Yikes i love it i dont read much poetry but the title caught me for some reason no critquing Arya got it all i think well anyway great job hope ...

I dont usally enjoy Vampire story but this being an exception i like it alot i cant wait to read the other chapters not critquing as of now very sleepy

I few grammer erro's but Silly Systick mentioned them all...... man i need to be quicker with my reviews well iot was very good keep it up!!!

Once again i am late to the critquing perfect it's really good i enjoyied it thou it be short i didn't expect any less form a speaker of the forums!

Wow i really love this pecie of writing i thout from the name *Yu-Gi-Oh!!!! lol but yes i do like your writing No critque from what i've seen everyone else ...

You no thats so true i have some emo friends there really just peolpe who react to things on a more emotional level anyone who makes fun of them are ...

I thout it was pretty good i can't really give any advice since i'ma novice to so!