Demeter

Hey, Maya! I haven't seen you around in a while! I think the basic idea was actually very nice, I only felt that the job interview thing was too self-evident ...

Hello, Nolan! I think this has quite the potential to become a great piece. I have a few nit-picks, however. So many lives taken; Not one smile. So many souls ...

Hi there, LRabbit, and welcome to YWS! Like Sam, I was sucked up to the story. The title is slightly boring (no offense!), but maybe that's only the working title? ...

Hello, 1der! The structure was random, it didn't connect in any pieces. There were long lines, short lines, stanzas of four, no stanzas at all. It's all a bit of ...

Hey, sday! I'm having a little hard time connecting those stanzas. The first and the third, okay, but what about that second one? To me, it's just in completely different ...

Hello! Just so you know, I know quite a little about sonnets and have never written any myself, so I don't know how good I am to review one. You ...

Okay, hello! I can see that this poem is written very passionately, but I'd suggest you don't use those bolds and italics etc. This won't be lacking any emotion even ...

... Wow. That was... different. It was a little weird and left me frowning, but that's the main reason I liked it. So you have left the i uncapitalized on ...

I'm sorry to say that I actually couldn't help laughing in some parts. No offense! But you need to make the characters and the happenings more believable, which they are ...

Hi. I read this the other day but I was too confused and busy to review it, then. First of all, you need to fix those capital letters and punctuations! ...

Hi! The rhyming, or non-rhyming, really disturbed me as well, but then I came to think that it just made more humorous, because the words don't just rhyme the slightest ...

Hmm, would I? That really put me into thinking. I think this affected me just the way you meant it to, so good job. To me, the "Would you" repetition ...

Hi, LLS! At first I want to say good luck on the contest! :) I don't know if this is what JFW wanted, I have to say I didn't really ...

Hello, Nolan, and welcome to YWS! Okay, the topics weren't my favourites, so I'm just going to review this techinically. It doesn't seem realistic that these strangers (at first) just ...

Yay, another one of your poems! The description and the imagery are great here, I can truly imagine the things and the places. Show me effervescent white caps I love ...