-
Re: Solitaire
Hey ongoeslife. I liked the beginning of your poem. The use of thwip and the relation between the object and her emotions was a very good beginning. And then the ...
Dec 23, 2012 -
Re: The Dollhouse
*ahem* I mean more ;P
Dec 14, 2012 -
Re: Salt (edited)
Wow, that was a good poem. It had a beautiful ryhthm to it and it has very vivid imagery. It was so nice that I personally cannot see anything wrong ...
Jul 23, 2012 -
Re: Pray
Ajt! I think this poem is really interesting. The idea I got from it was that you wanted things to improve in the world. That you wanted to pray for ...
Mar 28, 2012 -
Re: Prologue of The Five
I think this is really good. I'm looking forward to what is next and I like how you've set out the whole map for us already. We know their is ...
Mar 13, 2012 -
Re: Dear Nicki
It's good. Looks perfect to me and I don't feel like I can help you improve somehow on this. Deanie x
Jan 3, 2012 -
Re: Piano Boy
Hi! I really liked this poem. It was really nice and had a very good flow to it. I'm not going to make this too long because you seem to ...
Dec 17, 2011 -
Re: Invisible tears
I liked this! But you do need to add more. This is not the amazing review I promised you XD thats coming soon. My advice: more! Deanie x
Dec 8, 2011 -
Re: I miss the Rain
One word: Amazing
Oct 16, 2011 -
Re: A Note to the World: We Will Rise.
Simple and beautiful. A poem worth being written. I love your writing style. Deanie x
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: Ced/As Make-out Scene-MAJOR EDITS.
This version is a lot better than the precious. I like Mr. McCoy much better than Ale. I don't know why, but his name sounds more professional. Deanie x
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: Forevermore.
Very sad, descriptive and true poem. Deanie x
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: The Kiss
Interesting. I like how the boys are really close friends that after a little blow up the bond again very quickly. Reminds me of my arguments with my older sister ...
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: Beauty and The Beast
I liked this version of Beauty and the Beasts. It was really original and very interesting. I liked how you put it in the time of the Minotaur and how ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: Asteroids
Wow, this is really powerful. I see no grammar mistakes, except that in the beginning paragraphs you use the word 'no one' a lot, and you put it as a ...
Sep 21, 2011
