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Deanie

Deanie

  • Poetry » General, General Re: Solitaire

    Hey ongoeslife. I liked the beginning of your poem. The use of thwip and the relation between the object and her emotions was a very good beginning. And then the ...

    Dec 23, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: The Dollhouse

    *ahem* I mean more ;P

    Dec 14, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Salt (edited)

    Wow, that was a good poem. It had a beautiful ryhthm to it and it has very vivid imagery. It was so nice that I personally cannot see anything wrong ...

    Jul 23, 2012
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Other Re: Pray

    Ajt! I think this poem is really interesting. The idea I got from it was that you wanted things to improve in the world. That you wanted to pray for ...

    Mar 28, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Prologue of The Five

    I think this is really good. I'm looking forward to what is next and I like how you've set out the whole map for us already. We know their is ...

    Mar 13, 2012
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Dear Nicki

    It's good. Looks perfect to me and I don't feel like I can help you improve somehow on this. Deanie x

    Jan 3, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Piano Boy

    Hi! I really liked this poem. It was really nice and had a very good flow to it. I'm not going to make this too long because you seem to ...

    Dec 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Invisible tears

    I liked this! But you do need to add more. This is not the amazing review I promised you XD thats coming soon. My advice: more! Deanie x

    Dec 8, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I miss the Rain

    One word: Amazing

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A Note to the World: We Will Rise.

    Simple and beautiful. A poem worth being written. I love your writing style. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Ced/As Make-out Scene-MAJOR EDITS.

    This version is a lot better than the precious. I like Mr. McCoy much better than Ale. I don't know why, but his name sounds more professional. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Forevermore.

    Very sad, descriptive and true poem. Deanie x

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Kiss

    Interesting. I like how the boys are really close friends that after a little blow up the bond again very quickly. Reminds me of my arguments with my older sister ...

    Oct 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Beauty and The Beast

    I liked this version of Beauty and the Beasts. It was really original and very interesting. I liked how you put it in the time of the Minotaur and how ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Asteroids

    Wow, this is really powerful. I see no grammar mistakes, except that in the beginning paragraphs you use the word 'no one' a lot, and you put it as a ...

    Sep 21, 2011


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