Deanie

I liked this chapter. I saw one mistake and there was one thing I didn't understand... What was I supposed to do now? Betray my tribe to save Astor, or ...

At first I was slightly confused, but reading further I really liked it. It showed how she was connected to Astor, which was good because I was starting to think ...

Ah, my little mystery of who was the hospital boy is solved... I'm wondering why he was in Grandfather's room now? Was he in there because they are related or ...

Wow... this writing wowed me through and through. I just love how magical you made each line sound with the beautiful description you had there. It made the imagery amazing. ...

I like this poem. I thought when beginning to read this it was going to be a poem about the morning. Maybe a beautiful sunset or something without a strong ...

I liked this chapter just as much as the other one. The only thing that amused me quite a bit was when her hope shattered. You actually put in *shatters*. ...

I really like this poem. I haven't read any of your others though. Reading this, its just got a very powerful message. From the title I just assumed it would ...

I like your flow with this poem and the repetitiveness. It was really good. I only have two little nitpicks though: The One with the fire, The One with the ...

I like this. It's really sweet and it made me think how bad it must be for the guy proposing. From the title, I thought that the person would be ...

I really liked this poem. I didn't think it had much flow but it was kind of mysterious, very mythological. I liked that, it somehow suited the poem. I can't ...

I liked this poem. It really shows how you feel about war. I like how you opened up your poem with a question, it made me want to read more. ...

Hi Blondie! I just wanted to say, a very good first chapter. I liked the way you ended it, it made me want to read more. I'm not good with ...

Hmm... what an intriguing prologue! I really liked it and it has me hooked. I want to know what happens next! I don't have anymore time to read it tonight, ...

I found this poem so pretty and sweet. It made my eyes prick with tears, literally. I didn't cry, I almost never do that in writing, but I felt like ...

I like this. It suits its title, and brings across a strong story. I can relate to that a lot. I mean, in a way. I'm not behind a mask ...