DeProfundis

(Oh man, I feel like such a bastard for this review.) This poem is really emotional and the rage and pain does show through. However, the images used aren't all ...

It's a very literal poem, but that works, given it's written to convey a very specific message. Structure-wise it's not too complex, although that does fit. Breaking each line with ...

As ZlyWilk said, this is very vague. However, I would say that the last paragraph is less so than the others. The sentence 'Now as a mere zombie stuck with ...

Pretty decent poem. The tasting metaphor is good at tying it together. There's a couple of spelling errors ('all it's' should be 'all its' and 'yea'), but aside from that, ...

The first thing I noticed was that you are really good at building drama. The structure- short sentences and dialogue heavy- really helps build the atmosphere. However, there are moments ...

To start with, I like the structure. Having one sentence per line really drives home the force and anger of the message. (Ironically, it almost reminds me of the beat ...

Right, to start, I think this is a good concept. Some lines are also pretty fantastic. 'While being ugly sucks, I'd much rather have an ugly face than an ugly ...