Broken Love

disheartedallure here!
this might be late but I just had to say something about this, I am one of your anonymous followers so alike most things you write, I admire this. I can just feel from this poem, the emotions are so vivid and there and believe it or not it's not because of my own experiences or something but anyway, it's deep. The feels are there for sure. I feel like you're pouring your heart to me and that's exactly what a writer should make his/her audience feel despite prior experience.

Hello, I'm Howl.

I really like this poem and how you showed your feelings through out it. I hope that who ever you wrote this for sees it so they see how much you truly love them. Thank you for reading this review and I hope to see more of your work soon.

(Oh man, I feel like such a bastard for this review.)

This poem is really emotional and the rage and pain does show through. However, the images used aren't all that original. Using cliche language and images really hinders the emotive voice of them poem. Things like 'tears and pain', images of 'sinking' ect are very traditional images of heartbreak and only using them really limits the emotive power of the poem.

There is quite a bit of telling, not showing. While that's to be expected in poetry a little, there is a little too much here. You are telling the reader 'I am so broken' instead of showing them the effect this heartbreak has on you- refer to things like sleepless nights or whatever instead of outright stating emotions. It helps develop it and create a greater emotional reaction from readers.

Personally, I think the rhyme scheme does fit with the poem, as it creates a flowing feel to it. As the poem is a flowing out of emotion, it really helps drive home the point. However, it is possible some readers might think the rhyming couplets makes it seem a little contrived. Honestly, I prefer it how it is, but it's up to you.

Hello Moneypwnzb! This piece was really beautiful, and it inspired me to write some poetry as well! So thanks for that!

First of all, I want to tell you this poem is amazing. It's very emotional, but not melodramatic. That's a great quality to have in writing! Your word choice is also brilliant. It's natural but still descriptive and interesting. Have you ever thought about publishing?

Still, I feel like the periods at the end of some of the lines aren't enough to break up this poem. I think us readers need more of a pause between sections, Try putting it into stanzas and see if that works out for you!

Sorry this was such a short review, but it was too good for me to write a long, angry one!

This is such a powerful poem who brings out your pain and makes everyone who reads it feel what you feel. It is painful and romantic which gives it a charm. I really like the first lines, they really spoke to me. And the rest is grate too. The apology in the end is a beautiful touch. Only thing for me that didnt quite sound well was the last word heel, i've used a different word but it goes for you. I think my favorite lines were "I know you don't think,
That I am trying my best,
But I'm starting to sink,
And my heart needs a rest." I can relate to those lines.
Very powerful and emotional poetry, i'll hope to see more works like this- with such a powerful message.