DaughterofEvil

I enjoyed your amount of imagery, however I did find several problems with this story. #1: Your "minutes to go" seemed to go by incredibly fast. She begins to think ...

Hmm...the biggest issue with this story is that you forgot your quotation marks. Although I could somewhat tell who was speaking, that's still a distraction. Also, you should not use ...

It is a bit morbid, not that I mind that sort of thing. But in general, it was also a bit..scatterbrained. In light of the fact you wrote this absentmindedly ...

Hmmm....identity crises are common these days, and I think your poem captures that nicely, if it was intended to be a song. My only note for you is that your ...

I'm relieved you included that little note before the story began, otherwise I would have been utterly lost. Truthfully, I did enjoy this story, and found nothing wrong with it ...

I definitely enjoyed this work, and was sad to see there was no "Chapter 1" after the title name. Although, there does seem to be one problem. The setting of ...

Greetings, peasant! Ohohoho! I'm here to review your work! So, I have read this piece and found a large amount of spelling and grammatical errors. This takes away from the ...

Hmm...it's rare to find a positive poem that isn't about love these days. Well, your message was positive enough. My only suggestion here would be to get rid of the ...

I liked the topic of this poem. It almost made me think of Ms. Havisham from the novel Great Expectations by Charles Dickens. However, there were some spelling errors that ...

I'm not sure what the 8 line short story was, but if it was the sentences in bold, then that made for an odd ending! Anyway, I liked the message ...

OK, I made sure to review this chapter as well. First off: YAY! Character development! I thought it went a bit too fast in the first chapter, and too slow ...

I noticed some spelling errors in this chapter. To be honest, for some reason it was hard for me to keep my interest. I know the first few chapters are ...

Ohohohon~ As your rival in said contest, allow me to review your work! was definitely twisty, but to be honest it wasn't that fractured. As least, in my opinion.Red Riding ...

I see your message clearly, however....there were honestly so many spelling errors that it completely distracted me from the moral of your piece. I did not like this piece for ...

Ah, Lust. One of the seven Deadly/Cardinal Sins, you know. So, onto my review. I like this poem. I like it quite a bit. There's just one thing I have ...