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Re: Mess
Hey! Soz for the delay, but Danni here to review this as per request! I'm gonna go through this all, with my comments in italics , my corrections in bold ...
Aug 24, 2018 -
Re: Percy Jackson fan fic (title in works) Part 3
Hey TWFB! Danni (finally) here for a review! @Evander covered most of my nitpicks, so I'll just point out: we will divide the journey in to four parts , . ...
Aug 21, 2018 -
Re: The Funny Egg Poem
Hey there! D here to review this poem! As @riles said, I think it would be really good if line 3 was written as I wobble and jig until boom! ...
Aug 16, 2018 -
Re: change of hearts
Hi! Danni here for a review! First off, I did a bit of a double take at the end because your author's note wasn't marked out and I thought it ...
Aug 6, 2018 -
Re: ana
Hi! Danni here to review. I'm guessing this is about your dog? It's just the man's best friend bit. If so, I can totes relate to this with my chocolate ...
Aug 6, 2018 -
Re: The Stage Poem
Heyy! Danni here to review this! BTW I recently did a dance show, so this is pretty appropriate for me! I'll also be able to give you a better perspective. ...
Aug 6, 2018 -
Re: Percy Jackson fan fic (title in works) Part 2
Hey! Danni here for a review! Apols for the lateness :( I think @Evander mentioned this, but sometimes you need to use a full stop rather than a comma in ...
Jul 23, 2018 -
Re: Percy Jackson fan-fic (title in works) Part 1
Hey TWFB! Danni here to review! BTW, it would be easier if you put the chapter title in the main title, like: [fanfic title] Chapter 1: The Dead Girl's Story ...
Jul 8, 2018 -
Re: Psychic chapter ten
Hey AnimalQueen! Danni here for a review! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Jul 5, 2018 -
Re: Summer
Hi! Danni here to review this highly appropriate poem! I am writing this in London and at the moment it is dreary and cloudy, but for the past few days ...
Jun 23, 2018 -
Re: The Great Court Disaster
Hi AnimalQueen! First off, this is very long, so maybe split it into 'part one' and 'part two' as long works sometimes put readers off? This was really funny. I ...
Jun 18, 2018 -
Re: Tests Of All Tests
Hi MoonFlower! Danni here for a review! I love the way your new avatar and banner match this poem. (They look great, BTW.) Here is the poem with my comments ...
Jun 16, 2018 -
Re: Fall on deaf ears
Hi! Danni here for a review of this lovely poem! I have only one nitpick: I speak my voice trembles, I choke Maybe add a comma in between 'speak' and ...
Jun 11, 2018 -
Re: The Sculptor
Hi! Danni here to review this! This poem means a lot to me as it reminds me of me and my cousin. As @Radrook said, it does indeed hold a ...
Jun 7, 2018 -
Re: Never belittle passion
Hi Sree! Sorry I couldn't do this yesterday, I was bonkers busy. No spelling/grammar mistakes, so props to you! Again, this poem has such a beautiful meaning. I actually screenshotted ...
Jun 4, 2018