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He never really "wakes up", he can't. He is the only dream catcher so he is always controlling dreams...maybe I'll add some type of twist???

LOVE IT! I think it was perfect. You should have included the rest of the Cullens like Edward's parents. But I really like it, good job.

Yes more metaphors and things would be nice, and put what she's thinking in. Put yourself in her place, be your character. Oh and some type of survival would be ...

I'm actually an Alice fanGUY.

So cute. I really like how you wrote that, it flowed very nicely and it was very creative. I have one it a true story? lol.

Blue. Pale. Alone. I really like that part. It kind of throws you into that cold feeling.

I love it...

Yes he is, that's The Pit. The plot sort of goes... The guy is crazy. He did somethig that got him in "The Pit", but he doesn't know what he ...

Love it. It sounds like it's from a little kid that's sending it to a big newspaper or something...

This is only a very short fragment of the beginning, and yes he is supposed to sound a little wierd or crazy...

I woke up this morning and ate a bowl of cereal. Well… two if you want to be all… scientific about it I LOVED that part i actually laughed out ...

I have the WHOLE story under "Dream catcher---".

Thanks I loved that part too being a 13 year old boy.

I like it. I think how you ar writing it is perfect, the only way the true emotions could really be captured are ina journal I think. Great job, I ...

" No moon tonight. Must be evil forces a work." I grinned childishly unknowing the irony that was held in my words. I love that line!