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Thanks for the review! You're definitely correct about the wives--they have very little development, let alone importance in the story, which I'll have to remedy. The part about the mansion ...

Thanks for the review! I've been worried about showing vs telling, and it's really nice of you to confirm that I need work there! All advice really goes a long ...

Thanks a ton for the review! I'll definitely set to work paring it down--there is a bit too much going on there!

Thanks for the review! Yeah, rereading I'm seeing what you mean! I was going for an absurdist feel, but I think I kind of failed there lol! Thanks for the ...

Thanks!

Just a note--the blank comment was a total accident. Sorry! Now, onto your hilarious story! OK, this is so, so true. Especially the game board-flipping part! I ended up laughing ...

Thanks so much! I never would have seen a lot of those mistakes without your help!

Wow! Good job--you really did the trick with your second revision! Good luck!

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This is an interesting story. I had to read it twice, however, to understand exactly what was going on. If I were you, I'd add a little bit more detail ...

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This is an interesting story. I had to read it twice, however, to understand exactly what was going on. If I were you, I'd add a little bit more detail ...

Thanks for the review, AkankshaD! I was a little worried about the beginning--it is sort of irrelevant, and the way I start it off with that long description probably doesn't ...

Thanks for the review! It definitely is going to help me a lot going forward, as I think now I understand more how to polish up my story. I did ...

I'm not quite so open as a Diest (I'm a Catholic), but I also love discussing theology. I like your theory over why God put suffering in the world, however ...