Crysi

... *head/desk* I honestly can't take any HP fanfic stories seriously anymore, due to the fact that my friends and I formed the Marauders at school. I really can't take ...

Hmm... Interesting revision, although I don't like the repetition of "bodies." I do, however, like the line, "Subtract us from the world." I think that makes a more powerful statement ...

POST! Jeez. Everytime I see there's a new post on this thread, I rush to check for more chapters. Oh, and I hope you don't mind - I'm basing one ...

Hahaha... that's wonderful. The only suggestion I have is to change the rhymes in the first stanza... If you read it out loud, it just sounds like you're repeating "sea" ...

*hugs* Thank you Snoink. That was beautiful. It sincerely brought tears to my eyes. I have nothing else to say. But thank you, again. :)

*hands Dusky her conditioner* It's wonderful. Try it.

WW?! Where've you been??? *TACKLES* You totally just made my day by showing up! *dances* I mean... totally not off-topic... Thanks. :)

Haha, I like my retort. So me. Although (and here's my actual CRITIQUE), it IS a bit wordy. Read it out loud - it sounds a little awkward to me. ...

Hahahahaha... Everytime I told Bek I was writing a Norrington/Sparrow fanfic, she assumed it was slash. So did everyone else, actually. Who knows? Maybe it'll become slash... But for now, ...

*shrugs* I knew it wasn't wrong , and it's fine if that's the general use in your area. So it works. By the way, I tend to like inverted sentences ...

Wow. Usually I'm not a fan of rhyming poems, because they often seem too whimsical for the subject. However... you managed to pull off a somber tone, and the rhyming ...

Okay, so I'm having difficulty deciding how I'm going to divide up the chapters. Originally, this was part of the first chapter, but now I think it might be too ...

*grins* I'm mentioned! And and and I HAVE A LINE!!! *is satisfied* As long as Dono's the one babysitting... ;)

*shrugs* Saphirus told me. ;) (*laughs* Seriously? I just typed whatever came to me. That's somewhat creepy if it was actually accurate...) Snoink... Now I'm slightly nervous. :P

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