Crysi

Plagiarism is nothing to be proud of. *LOCKED*

I'll move it to the fanfiction forum for you, then. :)

I'm going to go ahead and move this to the Lyrics forum, okay? *MOVED*

Please do not spam. It is annoying and it gets you nowhere. *LOCKED*

*head/desk* I don't know whether I'm excited or terrified to find out what happens next. A bit of both, perhaps?

I thought it was... cute, but not profound. The last stanza does not work! You suddenly break your pattern, and it ends on a weak note. Fix that, and it ...

...Nice way to insult yourself? Just don't talk like that to other members, all right? This is more of a learning tool for children than it is an actual poem... ...

Aet, please stay on topic. PM her for something like that. Macky, these are lyrics to a song, not lyric poetry. I'm going to go ahead and move them over ...

This is... cute, although I might be biased because I have red hair and blue eyes. I'm just not certain it's good , especially because you "forgot the rest." Not ...

Spacing doesn't work on the forums. Please double-space between paragraphs, and maybe I'll come look at it again. Deleted your double post.

*laughs* I like when people disagree with what to change and what to keep. Makes me think I've done something right. ;) I'll give a little background on the poem ...

...Hmm. Okay, so this is a start... but where's the rest? I can't exactly critique something that doesn't have content.

*laughs* Yeah, it's been a long time since I've written poetry. Admittedly, I thought up this one while in the shower, and I wrote it down about an hour later. ...

AAAARGH. Dreamy, you're driving me crazy! You're replying to everyone, and I always get so excited when I see you've made a new post on this thread... And then I ...

Agreed. Although I'm glad I've gotten a bit more screentime. ;) Phorcys, do us a favor: if you don't like YWS fanfics, don't read them. It's that simple. You're not ...