Published February 17, 2007
Here is a song I made up:
I knew a girl,
that knew me,
we always used to walk down by the sea.
We were meant for each other,
we were stuck like glue,
I must say I'm in love with you.
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My love has red hair,
with blue eyes as well.
She smiles at me and she does it so well.
When I walk by her the only thing I see is the way she stares back at me.
And when call her, the only thing I hear,
Is the way she says my name, she says it so clear.
And I can't remember the rest
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we were stuck luck glue,
... should that be:
"stuck like glue"?
And you should remember the rest! *pokes*
This is... cute, although I might be biased because I have red hair and blue eyes. I'm just not certain it's good, especially because you "forgot the rest." Not a very good way to end something you post on here...
tat = that?
I like how you give love human features.
This is really short, I hope you are going to add more on to this. I think you could do a lot of other things with this. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this. Keep it up!