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Re: --
I think this is one of my favourite poems i've read on here. The rhythm and full rhyme make it flow magnificently, and your imagery is enchanting. I'm not entirely ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: Truly Greatful
I love this, it's so beautiful- your words seem to flow effortlessley and your emotion is awe-inspiring. This line is just... so wonderful: You and I have history to make ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: hurt
Without meaning to be harsh... it sounds very emo... Slightly navel gazing...: I slit my wrists to watch the blood fall, in precious pools on the floor Try to be ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Until Then
This is beautifully written but, i'll be honest, to me, it reads more like prose than poetry. Perhaps because of the amount of speech throughout? But please, don't take that ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: The Sorrows of Mother Earth
This is beautiful. Normally, i dislike long lines in poetry but i felt that in this one, it really worked. I'm not sure about the enjambement here: I knew him. ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Bumblebee's Journey
I also really liked it- very interesting subject! I like that your use of shorter lines and omition of pronouns gives the poem a sort of snappy, bee-like pace before ...
Jun 13, 2011
