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Thank you all so much for reviewing this, its not ,my best piece but from the advice you guys have given me, I'll edit this and hopefully make it better ...

This is already a song.

Thanks for both of your reviews! In the second stanza I meant she had bags under her eyes from staying out late and stuff. And when I used the word ...

Hey, I'm sorry but your poem bored me to death. It was far too repetitive and it just didn't work in this case. C.C :smt009

Hey, Thank you all for your good reviews. I really appreciate it. C.C

Hey, I really enjoyed this poem. It was really interesting, just like how a murderer should feel. I'm no grammar genius but I don't think you did anything wrong. It ...

Hey!, Firstly well done, it's not always easy to write poems like that, I know I'm useless at them. I really enjoyed the poem you had me reading till the ...

Hey, I'm not so sure about the grammar but I really liked the poem. The ending was very clever, Surprising. Well done, Keep writing. C.C

Well done. I liked the rhyming and thought it was very clever. Keep writing! C.C

Hey October Fall, I really liked this story, it was a bit on the short side though. I'm dying to know what happens next so please post more soon. It ...

Hey, I really liked this, it was different, in a good way. I was a bit confused as to what it was about but I did really like it.

Hey, The Grammar wasn't great but I like the whole idea of the story, real scary!