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Re: Jasper Chp.1
Hi! I like this story, even though it's short. You wrote with lots of detail and voice. I your word choice is awesome! I especially liked how she would "glide" ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Unwind
Hey there! So first thing's first: WHYYYYYYY??!?!?!? Ahhhg! The title caught my attention right away because I loved the Unwind series. (Can't wait for the next one, oh god) This ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Violations and Wounds- Chapter 3
Hi! Wow you're a really great writer! This whole story was very sensory and descriptive. I also really liked some of your word choice. This whole chapter is filled with ...
Jun 12, 2014 -
Re: All I wanted was Closure
Wooow! The first thing I can say about this is that the third stanza actually made me cringe. There was lots of sensory imagery in this, which was great. I ...
Jun 12, 2014 -
Re: Something Diabolical.
This was great! It's super funny. I stay up all night sometimes too, and I'm usually watching a YouTube marathon. I usually have some really weird dreams afterward as well. ...
Jun 11, 2014 -
Re: I'ma Cop
X'D This is hilarious. I love how he get's robbed at the end. I noticed you forgot an apostrophe in the line: "Jim: The feelings mutual." Also, a recommendation, what ...
Jun 10, 2014 -
Re: 1
Hi! I like this poem, it's fun and cute. It's always interesting when a piece of writing breaks the fourth wall or is written in second person. I think the ...
Jun 10, 2014 -
Re: Void
This is so sad. I can feel the emotion put into this piece. You did really well describing the void and how it slowly envelops you, and I can really ...
May 31, 2014 -
Re: just an essay on love!
This is so sweet! I totally understand that feeling when you do or watch something happen that's straight from the heart. I think the world would be so much better ...
May 31, 2014 -
Re: Carnation: The Assassin's Tears - Chapter 3
Hi! I really like this story. It's full of action, so you're never bored while reading. I see you're looking for advice for improving it, and the one thing I ...
May 31, 2014
