ColdZero

Hey guys Thanks for the reviews, it's just a basic preview of what I might be making a story out of. I didn't really go into detail or pay much ...

Thanks guys, I'll keep all your stuff in mind. Better start Chapter Two now :)

Mminc, you post stories chapter by chapter in YWS. However each chapter has to be in a different topic.

Oh that's okay, thanks for writing the critique up anyways. Yeah it is going to be the prologue to my other story, which I'm in the process of writing now ...

Thanks guys, this is only a brief, rough preview of Chapter One and there is lots of changes to be made still. I'm glad you do like it though, keep ...

Thanks Ranger Hawk. I'll take all of that into mind, I'm writing the Chapter One good copy now :) Also thanks for linking me to the rules of dialouge, I'm ...

Thanks Kanen. Yeah, I wouldn't mind you to crit it later on in the week :)

Thanks Izumi. Remeber, this is only a really rough preview of Chapter One. I've still got lots of work to do before I post the actual chapter one :)

Hey Jasmine. The time period, is really undecided at this point in time because I haven't had time to create all that for Elorenn just yet. Re guarding Amaril, Galaril ...

Yeah, I'll give it some thought and see how I could change the part where the blade's point slips between his forefinger and thumb. Thanks. I'm hopefully going to start ...

Hey WritersBlock Thanks for pointing out all the errors I made, I'll correct them and add more detail where needed. However I should have explained how this is just a ...

Thanks Izumi. I'll take that into mind, what I am planning on doing is editing this a few more times. Adding in and taking away or changing things to make ...

Hey Luke. Thanks, I understand now what he meant by putting chapters in different topics :)

Thanks Sly...I mean, Izumi. Regarding what you said about posting it in chapters, how do I do that? Do I post different chapters in different topics or what? ~ColdZero

Good work, I like it here. More focused on writing in comparison to War Stories forums eh :)