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Hey Olivia, I is here. C: Rummaging through her black Christian Dior Jazzclub leather patent bag with obvious finesse, Isabella pulled out her MAC lip gloss. She broke out into ...

Heya, Mixtape. I will be your friendly reviewer... Blue skies melted me up like butter shaping my day into a fluffy cloud. Comma: "Blue skies melted me like butter, shaping ...

Hey Arek! I will be your little friendly reviewer... Capitalization is Key You must, MUST, capitalize at the start of every sentence. It's part of those things that make a ...

Hey lhighton! Title : Euggh, ohhh, man. I hate it. Sorry. It just sounds much too Harlequin Romance-y, and I'm sure that's not what you're going for. Plus, the imagery ...

Welcome to YWS, Soul! I am the friendly neighbor Clo. 8) First of all: That picture is horrifying, haha. She thrashed about wildly, covers ensnaring he like vines on a ...

Hey Ella! I am your friendly, neighborhood reviewer~ One thing I notice right off the bat: You have a few paragraphs that are way too long . It's okay to ...

SAM! How did this slip past me? I didn't notice it was posted until I saw it in my newsfeed one of the times YWS logged me out. You need ...

Welcome to YWS, Hikari! I hope you enjoy it here! Site Rules : I would suggest checking out the rules for some juicy necessary tidbits. One of these is that ...

Hi Cammie, I like your idea of many short stories making one big story. Sounds like House on Mango Street. Nitpicking First a brown-haired woman who appeared to be at ...

Welcome to YWS, Chilly Willy! You should have had two reviews before posting your own work, but I'm sure you'll get reviewing soon. :) Wow, this is exceptionally short. Perhaps ...

Hey Kaila Marie! I am your reviewer for today. ^^ Yeah, Daddy?” she shouted back towards the screen door she had just heard whine open. “Parker is on the phone!” ...

Heya Liz! I am your friendly neighborhood reviewer, today. :D Opening paragraph : It's a tad too long. Try splitting it up into smaller paragraphs, since you do vary in ...

Heya Kaida! I am already higher than most planes, seeing the sky because all it is is my world, for I have known nothing else That's an awkward phrasing in ...

Hey Sela! I am here as your devious reviewer *ties on cape and hops around* Nit-picky slightly deluding the smell of old cigarettes and pretended cleanliness. Pretended sounds kind of ...

Hooray, Olivia! Petra had only been at Haulcross University seven weeks and for the previous three " for seven weeks and in the previous three". I don't know, I think ...