Thanks all for the critiques.
Ashleylee - That's really sweet of you. I'm not yet sure if there will be a follow-up, but if there is, I'll be sure to PM.
clograbby - Uh-huh, I see what you mean about the title. I didn't think it was too bad, but I'll bear what you say in mind.
With the everything quote, I was trying to show the 'everything' was a sort of object. I failed, huh?
I understand Anne's feelings, but I don't understand why she feels that way. What has happened in her life to make her fear love like this? What has influenced her? Where are these thoughts stemming from? She says she's been alone, but you mention her mother before.
I tried to make it clear that she had isolated herself from other people and never trusted anyone enough to let them get close.
omsvmars22 - Thanks! I will PM if there's a follow-up.
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