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Let me say this: I know this thread will soon be deleted. Rest in peace, freedom of expression and speech. I am not ungrateful for responses. I find it completely ...

If you are just going to tell me you don't like it and then not offer any suggestions, please don't crit my work at all. I'm here for constructive criticism, ...

C'mon guys, how about a little love?

Bob - Je parle français pour dix ans, donc, je comprendre. Mais votre phrase en français a tort. Peut-être, direz: ce n'est pas Paris, mais ma dame d'amour. Basically, your ...

You're welcome. Free verse isn't something to be afraid of. It's liberating. Hence, FREE verse. I suggest, before you launch yourself headlong into a new form of poetry, reading some ...

P.S. "A Separate Peace" is an AWESOME book. I've never met anyone besides myself who liked it, so you're a welcome suprise!

Here's the revised version. Again, crits are appreciated. “Aubade” By K.J. Hascall 8/19/06 Revised 8/26/06 I slip out to the back stair at a late night, late summer party, alcohol ...

Antigone - thanks for the crit! It was very helpful. I've taken your advice on the bit about ice cubes, breaking up the sock drawer line, and the "very acutely." ...

Ani - thanks for reading. Vermillion is spelled right, because that is the American spelling. You are probably more familiar with the British spelling, which only employs one 'L'. "The ...

I like this poem because I despise Shakespeare. Just a thought.

A question: Why is it “Observation from the Back Stair”. tenants-tenant’s. "We lean against the walls and railings, content to enjoy the polite talk, for sometimes we are the only ...

Well, the title is changed, but there's really nowhere to break for stanzas. It doesn't need them, nor want for them.

Bump?

I guess I just feel, Jiggity, that poetry has no purpose unless it touches the reader in some way. I'd recommend Ted Kooser's "The Poetry Home Repair Manual." He was ...

Thanks Fand! That's actually a compliment I get a lot - that my poems are like reading paintings.