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Well, in my opinion, before the last three stanzas, you seem to repeat yourself over and over again with the same topic. It became sort of a nuisance. Anyhow, you ...

If you ask me, writing a story within a poem is a rather intricate task. However, I think this is an exceptional poem to have been narrative. Except these two ...

this poem belongs in a book. i dont know why, but it just reminded me of one of those poems you read in the middle of a good book and ...

That didn't suck. You know how I know? Because it's 2:00 in the morning and I'm usually lazy around this time and I read the entire thing without falling asleep. ...

"When I see you, I automatically get cramps, whether I’m pmsing or not is beside the point." pmsing? and this is... Well, the poem in general, at least to me ...

Reminds me of a House of Heroes song. (Not exactly a compliment) Anyway, the "today" twice in a row in the first stanza was redundant...they should take out or change ...

"and we always knew you would be one to save us but we missed all the warnings and now your blood is on our hands." This was very strong, which ...

Hm...I just read this a few minutes ago and I enjoyed it. It reminded me of a song. I started to pick up my guitar and play to it,lol. Anyway, ...

Yes, this poem became very confusing in some parts. So you answered in the affirmative like the cool, purple aches and pains of rain which sprawled across the roads outside. ...

dido what everyone else said, but i would also like to add the fact, that even though this poem was simple--and probably not the best thing you've written, however, you ...

This was sort of lengthy, yet intriguing....wow. I wish I could write like this,lol. But this is very good, Jack... it's more expensive to buy a y-shaped coffin but of ...

:Ahem: Since you're my sister, I don't necessarily have to be that concerned of your feelings. Anyway, Jamie, why did you name this forum George Bush Fans? I know you're ...

I've got 4 things to say about this poem: 1. You spelled think and problem wrong. 2. Put a space after punctuations 3. "If your "friends" leave you because of ...

How many times do you have to break unbroken silence with muffled screams Wow...I loved those two lines. This was almost like a...geez. I can't think of the word...monologue...I think ...

head hurts. This was very exciting and kept me reading but their are two things: 1. Why is this is the Lyric section? 2. Why are there soooo many subjects? ...