ChernobyllyInclined

First of all, you need to separate the paragraphs. You'll get more reviews that way. Anyway, this was slightly interesting. I believe the idea has potential, it just needs to ...

I read the first chapter a week ago but didn't review it because you already had a thousand reviews and I didn't have any. I was being arbitrary in a ...

This was ridiculously good. And not because your writing is perfect but because the characters are SO REAL. I read about the same characters so often that I despair of ...

Wow. Very intriguing. But again, their relationship doesn't seem too realistic. I blocked Chester during lunch, “We need to talk.” “There’s nothing to talk about.” “Yes, there is,” I rep

This was kind of flat. You did a lot of telling and not very much showing. There needs to be more action, more character development. Perhaps start it out at ...

Hmmm...The writing was okay. But the story was blatantly unoriginal. Anyone whose even HEARD about Twilight would be able to tell that you are simply copying it. If you like ...

The writing was good, along with the punctuation and grammar, which I suppose go together. But the story was nothing new. I'm not exactly sure what you could do to ...

seems odd to put something on here that you wrote four years ago that you agree is really dumb. Usually, if you decide to put something you wrote a while ...

This was interesting. I think I liked it. It flowed fairly well and the description was vivid, pretty. My only criticism would be about the characters. I feel like they ...

Little copycat. I'M the one who reviews my own stories when no one else will. Damn. This definitely flowed well. It wasn't choppy, the way it was before, but it ...

This could be interesting. It just needs some work. Felix brushed his hair back, running his fingers through his hair. You repeated the word,'hair'. Change the sentence to avoid the ...

Yay, more of my favorite story. This was interesting, the description held very closely with the suspense, I quite liked it. I agree with Vampy though, this is probably too ...

You need to space the paragraphs. You'll get more reviews that way, it much easier to read when there are spaces between the paragraphs. At the beginning you said you ...

I liked this. Most certainly. Ink got most of the technical problems but heres one that she missed... I glance up from over my dampened leather notebook. Surveying the streets ...

Hm. If I were to be completely honest, I don't like romantic fiction - gay romance even less. The writing was good; the description very vivid. Characters: The characters were ...