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Chasmira1060

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: It Means Nothing (version two)

    Extremely powerful. Wonderful imagery, especially towards the very end. This scrolled before me like a movie, I could picture it all in my head, much as with my novel Bloodmaiden, ...

    Jul 9, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Seasonless

    Brilliant and captivating! i was hooked from the start by your description of the forest, comparing the autumn leaves to fire; I also felt the fire representative of the dying ...

    Jul 9, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Regret Letters (formally know as Eliza and Morgan)

    This is truly brilliant, some of the best writing I have read on this and similar writer's websites! Your writing is simple yet beautiful, with lovely imagery that made it ...

    Jul 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: "Why do I love" you.

    Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant; after reading the first metaphor, I intended to quote and commend how well it works; but reading the whole poem, there are too many excellent metaphors to ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Darkness to Darkness

    I really enjoyed reading this story; I always love tales that put a new twist on how something came to be. The title I thought was very clever, and I ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Heart Flutters

    Simple but lovely--and definitely speaks to a lot of us who have experienced unrequited love! I used to experience some of these symptoms over a guy I liked for seven ...

    May 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Children of God, Prologue

    Brilliant! The writing is very good, and I feel as though you use a very literary style. I actually liked the lack of quotation marks; I thought perhaps you used ...

    May 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: SHM part 1: The Begining ch1 sec2: Brianna and Brian

    Truly intriguing! The table's bubbling is quirky--in a good way, I like unique things! I hope we later explore the friends' connections more, I found that interesting as well. I ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: SHM Part 1: the begining chapter 1 sec. 1: Laney

    Very intriguing start. At first, when her feet are washed in blood, I thought she had killed someone herself. But reading on, it becomes so much more interesting than that! ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Tears of Fire (Rewritten portion in a first person POV)

    I find this piece quite brilliant. The language is very beautiful; I love how all the metaphors parallel her real life. At first, I felt like everything she was describing ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Curses of Elsa: a medeival 'witch girl'

    "A girl with sand-white skin strolled in the common. Tendrils of flaming auburn curls spilled from beneath a kerchief that was tied tightly about her head. She had fine, intelligent ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Message in the Stars Part 1

    Wow, this is actually really brilliant! I love the first line: "The world wrinkled, sending waves of light across the air like ripples in water." The description here is beautiful ...

    May 16, 2010


She conquered her demons and wore her scars like wings.
— Atticus