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Re: It Means Nothing (version two)
Extremely powerful. Wonderful imagery, especially towards the very end. This scrolled before me like a movie, I could picture it all in my head, much as with my novel Bloodmaiden, ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: Seasonless
Brilliant and captivating! i was hooked from the start by your description of the forest, comparing the autumn leaves to fire; I also felt the fire representative of the dying ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: Regret Letters (formally know as Eliza and Morgan)
This is truly brilliant, some of the best writing I have read on this and similar writer's websites! Your writing is simple yet beautiful, with lovely imagery that made it ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: "Why do I love" you.
Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant; after reading the first metaphor, I intended to quote and commend how well it works; but reading the whole poem, there are too many excellent metaphors to ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: Darkness to Darkness
I really enjoyed reading this story; I always love tales that put a new twist on how something came to be. The title I thought was very clever, and I ...
May 28, 2010 -
Re: My Heart Flutters
Simple but lovely--and definitely speaks to a lot of us who have experienced unrequited love! I used to experience some of these symptoms over a guy I liked for seven ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: Children of God, Prologue
Brilliant! The writing is very good, and I feel as though you use a very literary style. I actually liked the lack of quotation marks; I thought perhaps you used ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: SHM part 1: The Begining ch1 sec2: Brianna and Brian
Truly intriguing! The table's bubbling is quirky--in a good way, I like unique things! I hope we later explore the friends' connections more, I found that interesting as well. I ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: SHM Part 1: the begining chapter 1 sec. 1: Laney
Very intriguing start. At first, when her feet are washed in blood, I thought she had killed someone herself. But reading on, it becomes so much more interesting than that! ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: Tears of Fire (Rewritten portion in a first person POV)
I find this piece quite brilliant. The language is very beautiful; I love how all the metaphors parallel her real life. At first, I felt like everything she was describing ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: The Curses of Elsa: a medeival 'witch girl'
"A girl with sand-white skin strolled in the common. Tendrils of flaming auburn curls spilled from beneath a kerchief that was tied tightly about her head. She had fine, intelligent ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: Message in the Stars Part 1
Wow, this is actually really brilliant! I love the first line: "The world wrinkled, sending waves of light across the air like ripples in water." The description here is beautiful ...
May 16, 2010
