Catriona

Now I think that this is really a very good basic idea for a poem, and I love the possiblilities of where it could go, but the main problem that ...

Well this really isn't a poem (ok, it isn't a poem at all) it's more like a quote or something. It's really pretty, and could be a good idea for ...

First of all, I would suggest trying non-rhyming poetry. Rhyming may seem easier but often takes much out of the poem where free verse is more, well, free. A display ...

Wow, this was really good!! I loved how you started each section then described it, and this one was just outstanding!! I am a glass girl, blunt words from a ...

That was pretty good. I like how you were slightly (lack of a better word) random (if you get how I mean it) with your rhyming. It seemed in a ...

--Then, all at once, they stopped. The shadow released Karen's neck, and she dropped to the floor, coughing. The shadows ran, disappearing into the night. -- I think you should ...

Just so you know, I ADORED this part... -It amazing how fast the cops will believe something her, especially if you have lots of money. Things had to end with ...

I always love four-line poetry... but the only reason I knew what it was about was because of the title... not sure if you wanted it that way, if so; ...

In my way of thinking, you should only put "Soon so soon", once in each stanza (I'd suggest the beginging...) . That would make it a bit easier to read. ...