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Re: Apathy of the Weasle
Hi, Cathe993 here! First, this is a pretty hard literary work to review. From what I understand, you are trying to show a teacher's frustration over his students' behavior, right? ...
Oct 20, 2016 -
Re: Republican Fairytales
Hi, Cathe993 here! First, I think your stories are hilarious. They do reflect some of the political points of view and situations today. For "Rapunzel", I think there's a typo--there ...
Oct 18, 2016 -
Re: Burning Rocks
Hi, Cathe993 here! I like your descriptions of scenes--I can see them in my head! I can also feel the emotions the characters have. :) Check your grammar a bit. ...
Oct 17, 2016 -
Re: The Startup
Wow--I've actually finished reading this!! Now first, great plot, great story, great characters. I think you wrote this story a bit too fast, though--check your grammar and punctuation carefully! Read
Oct 16, 2016 -
Re: One Huge Decision
It's a wonderful narrative with a nice theme and lesson. You might want to list out what the pros and cons you were thinking about before you made your decision, ...
Oct 16, 2016 -
Re: Boarding school for the Elite
The story is pretty good so far. The breaks are a little confusing, though. Maybe if you tried to introduce each part or add a few extra sentences to make ...
Oct 16, 2016 -
Re: Those With Wings
I think your story is great! The descriptions are wonderful and I can see the scenes in my head. In this sentence: Her coal-black scales melted into the shadows of ...
Oct 15, 2016
