Cassandra

Personification? It would seem that we have opposite tastes in books, Claudette! Which makes it pretty funny that we really like eachother's NaNo plot...XD

I second Shafter, Shadow. The "all of a sudden" really throws off the whole flowly description thing you have going. This piece is too good for such a phrase! Again, ...

Repetition it is! :D And Claudette, Jiggity: from what I understand, she has more of this written...this is just a taster? It's like me giving you a couple paragraphs of ...

The main conflict has not been highlighted yet. These first few entries are meant to establish the daily going-ons in Emily's life. Her world will suddenly go topsy-turvy by the ...

I know what you mean about making it original, but swearing definitely isn't the way to do it. A few are okay, but other than that, it just weighs the ...

Interesting idea. A story written by a man who was assassinated? This could be a difficult one in plot terms, surely an experianced assassin would...well, check the corpse, feel for ...

Aye. People certainly do mature as they get older, and they also write about different things. But is their writing really better because of that? Is it not just in ...

XD All together like this, it's fantastic. I love the ending too. Bradley. Haha. :D

This was a pleasurable read. It was something I might expect to stumble upon in a Shel Silverstein book. Shel Silverstein--exactly! Enjoyable read, Snoink. Yayness for limerick-ness!

Mmm. Who's Grey? Just a random character or...? I'm confused. And if I may ask: why is your main character in Hufflepuff? She doesn't seem particularly loyal... Random character, but ...

So intense! I like how you start every chapter (so far) with just a "he" or "she", so we don't know who it is at first. Very cool. Mmm. I ...

Mmm. Who's Grey? Just a random character or...? I'm confused. :( And if I may ask: why is your main character in Hufflepuff? She doesn't seem particularly loyal... :)

Aye, that's better. I think the best part about it is the changed title. The former title confused me since the story didn't seem to go with the title. ^_^ ...

Grammar and facts have been EDITED, the actual story not so much. XD Thanks to everyone above for reading and replying! Comments and suggestions still welcome...

Song titles--will italics work? Because I do have all the titles in italics on Word...the slantiness just got kind of lost on the transfer over here... *Makes mental note of ...