Carmina

As far as getting the emotion of the situation on paper, good job. Your pain and concern for your family come across very well. It comes across, though, as something ...

It is an interesting beginning, but I don't think there is enough here to get a good understanding of your intentions with the story. Something creepy about the house and ...

That is the most random story I have ever read. It sounds like something from a collection of sick and twisted minds. Which is not to say that it is ...

I only critique poems I like. Here is my critique. If you are going to start with a cliche, put it in quotes so that the person reading it doesn't ...

The second line is a very nice image. I like the idea of sttic (which is audio) opening up (which is visiual). It is slightly incongruous, but I like it. ...