Calla

Man talk about a good cliff hanger! There were now grammar errors as far as I could see. I liked it a bunch and can't wait to read more! If ...

Is that good or bad?

First of all, a common writing rule is to never, ever, use the word "you." It's not proper grammar. Second, "The other gods and goddess, there wasn’t really that many." ...

Well for some reason our computers at school won't let us do that. We can type it into the box like that to post, but it just clumps toghther.

Thank you!

Thanks for the review! I guess this needed more work than I thought!

Thanks for the review!!! :)

Wow! Thank you sooo much! And I'm still mad about it not letting me put stanza's! (I think I spelled that right!) And just to put reason here, the last ...

This makes me so mad! YWS, Y U NO LET ME HAVE STANZA??????

Wow, thanks soo much! This will definately help me should I choose it for my audition peice!

Well, Characters seem good. Dialogue is a little off. And maybe one or two grammatical errors, but all in all that's all I noticed! That's really great that you can ...

This is so good, is this the same one I read in the Seminar room last week?

Wow babe, you did such a great job with this. :) My little writer. I spotted a few grammatical errors, but nothing tat really jumps out at you and screams ...