Caesar

Firstly, I'm interested in what's going to happen. However, I find that in many points it's hard to visualize where the character is- as it lacks description-. Also, in some ...

Cool. Though at times I feel the narrative and/or dialogue is too fast. Try to insert some commas. For example: He was once again in front of me... I was ...

Die/me? Not so sure about that. In my humble opinion, try 'mine'. Also, I don't get that one verse- thy (your) broken body of me. Enlighten me. :) Also- unforrows? ...