Cade

Well, really, if you put stuff up here, you're asking for criticism. People are only trying to help you improve your work. Poetry can be very therapeutic in terms of ...

I haven't seen a cinquain in years! I used to be obsessed with these when I was about eight. I made a poster teaching my parents how to write one. ...

blonde is right in that poetry is a good way to express yourself and get feelings down on paper, but was this successful for an audience? As Clau said, the ...

Agitation And Aggravation Why are they all capped? It made me think of AAA, which made me think of old people. After that, I didn't think much of anything, except ...

I liked reading something that doesn't sound like what I've read of Brad's poetry. I think that the poetry in the first person is much more effective than this was, ...

SNAP! I like this. It has that mystical shivers-up-spine but really-intriguing kind of feel. Hehe, I used to be in a magic club in middle school - our advisor was ...

I didn't really understand this but the description was great. It was at a perfect length. I actually felt like I understood this too much. I mean, the part about ...

I feel as though this poem is a prisoner of its rhyme. Rhyme, though forced, existed, but the rhythm was iffy at best. A lot of the phrases in here ...

Saying this poem is short is stating the obvious. Short does not equal bad, though. I feel, though, that you could've fit so much more in here. Yes, it needs ...

Do whatever Clau tells you to do! I agree with her; I didn't really know what was going on here. Obviously this is the voice of some malevolent and deadly ...

Ha! Fantastic voice. As a poem, of course, it doesn't go too far, but it is humorous and really enjoyable to read. A nice break from angsty/cliche/pretentious poetry. Yay! The ...

Hmm, I like this bread thing you've got going on, although the "bread of life" line was a little trite. Yeast, saltine crackers, Exodus, references to things being "thin". As ...

They had cut out his eyes: [s]they knew not[/s] they didn't know how much those things leaked The liver part makes sense now; I'm not sure I didn't get that ...

Why the archaic language in the beginning but not anywhere else? What is "Hlafweard"? *is confused* So. This is about an apple. Right? It made me think of Snow White ...

**~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~** What the heck is that? It's not part of the poem, I know, but it's ditzy. I'm sorry. It was really distracting. Anyway, on to the real poem: This ...