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Re: What life has to offer
That's pretty good. I liked how it was a flashback. It makes me think about going back to school and daydream of my own summer mischievities. Maybe for the thing ...
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: Connections
My honest opinion of your story was that it was well written ad the descriptions were pretty vivid. You truly painted it out for anyone who reads it. On the ...
Jan 2, 2012 -
Re: Im Going To Hell
This story, I have to say, was a pretty difficult read. You seemed to jump perspective quite a bit from third to first, especially when you were trying to show ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: Fire
I thought the overall description and personifacation in the story was what stood out most about it. It was very vibrant look into something as simple as a house fire. ...
Oct 17, 2010 -
Re: By the pool
I tend to disdain romantic stories but i thought this was pretty good. The character connections were pretty great as was the setting for the story. It gave me a ...
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: The Wild Ones Ch.1 & 2
I thought the plot was pretty good, i'm a big fan of the life after people concept. The description really painted the picture for me, and i loved the way ...
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: Coma(The Shell)
First off, i'm not sure what you were trying to convey with this, second off it really had no point. It had style to it but i really don't get ...
Aug 9, 2010 -
Re: Where The Music Is
I thought it was a decent story. You changed things up at some points though, make which portion of the MC that was injured more clearer. Another thing i didn't ...
Aug 9, 2010 -
Re: Dawn Of A Death
Man, i gotta say i have yet to be dissapointed whenever i read any of your works. I liked the irony that as many able bodied people attempted to off ...
Aug 4, 2010 -
Re: Mastermind
This really just seems to be filler for another story. There wasn't much of a plot other than some martin scorsese type bandits chattin over cuts. If you decide to ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: HIGH TIDE part1
the girl who reviewed you wasn't far off from the truth. I'm not gonna get on you for grammar or anything like that. I couldn't really finish it. It could ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: The Stuggles of Antier - Part II
i thought it was damn good. Each character was well identified with their own personal traits and they complimented and foiled each other pretty damn good. It was a good ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: 7. Outdated (part 1)
So i did not read the first six parts but i have to say this part was not bad. it was a good nastolgic feelng there at the beginning, the ...
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: The Necklace
Pretty good, pretty pretty good. It just needs some polishing and thats it. I won't talk about grammar, only chodes really get on what spell check can solve. Unlike most ...
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Operation Frostbite: Death at Sea
I couldn't really finish it, with that said i can't really give good criticism on the story. The whole thing all and all is a little bit flat. It didn't ...
Jul 31, 2010
