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Hey, content-wise I really enjoyed your poem. I didn't get much of a setting which left a little confusion, but normally I wouldn't expect that from a poem this short ...

I'm probably not saying anything that hasn't been said already, but this is a great story on every front. I love the story itself, especially the way you integrated the ...

Wow... you just bottled more emotion into a short story than most full-length novels. I have no idea how you captured a character that well, and I think my heart ...

This is definitely worth finishing, though I even think the current 'ending' is passable. Your rhymes are creative and interesting, though sometimes they do feel a little cumbersome. Maybe you ...

Really, really good. I liked the premise and you gave a whole new meaning to 'green-freak'. Because it's a short story you don't really see the characters that well... so ...

As a fan of dark comedies, I wasn't exactly sure what to expect when I started this. The premise seems just so out-there... but again it makes almost perfect sense. ...

I don't think there's anything I haven't said in a previous review yet, :smile: but I'll say again that this is really, really excellent. Your grammar though, it is off ...

Good job with the character development so far, and your dialogue is still spot-on. I'm getting a lot of feeling from the story, which is always good. And the flow ...

Wow. I really wasn't expecting this to be that good when I clicked the link. I'm not sure where to start, so I'll go with my rating system (I'm inventing ...

Good story! It works pretty well as a standalone (even though you said it was a sequel) and I found it very interesting and intriguing. Your characters are well-defined, and ...

Good job with this (as always). Just a few more nit-picky things; the "shoot" in laundry "shoot" should be "chute." Train of thought is usually singular (I've never seen it ...

Wow, this is getting really good. You fixed every nit-picky grammatical thing that was wrong with the first chapter, and I loved the flashback itself. Just one thing, the rule ...

I am a white American of European descent and I try to preach this message to every person I know. Some of my best friends are Muslim and I hate ...

Nice job, I really enjoyed the story itself. You managed to pack a lot into a small chapter, and I really can't wait to hear more. However I did notice ...

Very, very good. Kudos for turning something from the Theme Generator into a nice read. Loved the story itself, it kept me hanging pretty well and then gave that emotional ...