Bugslake

Thanks for listening.

I'll try working on that

Okay that helps a lot but it may confuse other readers.

"Keep calm and being obsessed over fictional guys isn't it?"

I have to say that this is a very intriguing story. There are times when I feel like you need a new paragraph and every once in awhile your words ...

Thanks for clearing that up.

You know, I've actually thought about this before. I just have never had the guts to put it into words. The way you've said it is exactly how I feel ...

Totally working on tenses, that is my downfall.

The fictional character I'm obsessed with is Four or Tobias from the Divergent series. I'm glad that someone else likes my characters and their names. Sorry about the grammar and ...

Honestly I do love your character and I think that this will be a very good story.

Definitely old work, but not everyone knows about Avatar or what it's about. I, for one, am not an Avatar fan. I kind of know what is going on, but ...

This is a very good start. There are some misspelled words here and there, but I am willing to overlook that because I like the concept behind your story. I ...

This was very good and compelled me to read more. If you write more I think that I'll be a big fan.

You have a lot of potential as a writer, but there are things that need working on, like spelling and grammar. I like how you create a scene with your ...