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Re: Removing The Mask ~ Chapter One
I don't have any problem with it being long, in fact I'm one of those that likes to take their time and just read posts all day. Honestly this was ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Two Wrongs Really Don’t Make a Right
It is a good beginning to a story. Sometimes I had a hard time believing that the character was a dude. The way you made him act and talk was ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Memories in the Making (A Homecoming Story)
Honestly there was a lot of content in something so short. It proves that you are able to create worlds with only a small amount of words. I really like ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Took some advice under consideration so leave me your reviews :)
This is a very interesting beginning to a story. I like how much emotion is within this segment of writing. I was a little confused about her not crying before ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Tension On The Field: Chapter One
In the last sentence with the father explaining everything there was a grammatical error and a word was missing. I felt like you made her sound a little predictable. It ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: Misake, First Half of Part One
This is a very good story. There are a few mistakes with spelling and grammar. I think that you should keep on writing this, it has a very good plot. ...
Jul 3, 2013 -
Re: Warrior
This is a very good piece of work. I like how fast it goes in the beginning. I can't wait to see what happens to Praxis, he seems like a ...
Jul 2, 2013