Hi iheartbooks,
Mailice here with a short review!
Hm... that was a very nostalgic piece you presented to us here. At first glance, it gives me a bleak melancholy that turns into a warm-up as I read, putting me in an emotional stupor of reliving a memory I've held for a long time but never wanted to see again. Not because it is so unattractive, but precisely because it is so beautiful and I know I will not relive it as I did that evening.
I like that the story keeps itself so short and lacks anything of a plot. It gives this snippet of memory a greater effect and leaves a good impression on the reader. Most of all, I like how you've managed to tell so much with so little information, that the characters themselves seem very alive and you can feel that the night is coming to an end.
Your writing style seems a bit flat at the beginning, but it gets better as you go on. Still, I really like the beginning because you have done an interesting way of starting the story here; first you describe the immediate surroundings of the characters and the narrator, and then you reveal to the reader where exactly the characters are and from that the first idea of what exactly has happened in the last few hours develops.
I also like the fact that the dialogue itself is kept short so that it feels fragmentary and makes you feel like you remember very little of it. It also gives the text a certain distance that is established between the reader and the characters, which leads to that feeling of homecoming that you describe in the title.
All in all, I like the story very much. It leaves a deep impression on me, and I can well imagine that despite the mention of a song, in such a moment - should this be a film - something melancholic or very calm and relaxed is played by music.
Have fun writing!
Mailice
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