BookLover33

This story is really good! I like your detail, and smooth the story line is. Although it could be longer, I don't really see any problems. I'll DEFINITELY be looking ...

I like the story line, but it needs a little more detail. When I read, I like to be able to picture the story. But other then that, I really ...

By the way, I like some of the ways you described Autumn and Winter. I could really picture it in my head. Good Job! But remember, you have to get ...

Hi! BookLover33 here! Although you did have a few good lines, the poem fell short of what I was expecting. if you work on it, (when you're fully awake,) then ...

Hey there! Booklover33 here! And I just wanted to tell you that this poem is pretty good! While the grammar and length could use a little work, I liked it.

This is really good! I look forward to seeing the rest of it! :-)

This is an awesome piece. Well Done!!!!!

Thanks for pointing out what I did wrong, I just fixed it and tweaked the story line a bit. Hope you all like the new Story!

I like this. I hope to find more of the story!

I'm glad you liked that sewer part. I was really hoping SOMEONE would find it entertaining. And thanks for pointing out my mistakes. I'll remember them the next time I ...

I admit I saw a LOT of things I wanted to change, I'm just to lazy to!:D Anyways, glad you liked it on the whole. Would you mind looking at ...

Thanks for the tips! I'll make sure to keep them in mind the next time I write. Glad you liked it!

Wow! That was extremely good! I've always wanted to be able to write like that! I can't wait to read more!