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Haha, I think Bubbling was better. Long review: Anyway, I liked the idea of reading something of yours. I haven't been in chat for a while so you won't have ...

This isn't bad, not bad at all. A lot of the rhymes flow well and there's a good selection of imagery in here. That said, there are some serious faults ...

Back again. ^^ Sorry for the delay; hopefully, this will still be helpful to you. Okay, what I felt this lacked at the start was a good bit of description ...

Hey ofir. =) The subtle difference between her and the rest of Mrs. Tompson's tenth grade class was very hard to discover. I don't like that last bit, "was very ...

Hey! Nice to meet you. =) Mind if I take a peek at this? Chasers, Roamers, Changelings, The Confession, non-readers, readers... it's too much, especially so for a first chapter ...

Hello there. ^^ Well, firstly, you might want to check out YWS' rules - we do ask that you do at least two reviews for each submission you make. :wink: ...

Moved to Other Fiction. If you want to get feedback, you should post it in the literary areas. :wink: If you think this would be better in another literary forum ...

Kylan... I found myself disagreeing with a lot of the nitpicks above, and yet agreeing with some of the overall points. I have noticed a slight style change in here, ...

Hey Gal. I'll give this a go. ^^ We landed a man on the moon, our souls on the monsoon as he watches from a distance, garb drenched in rain ...

"haikus" = "haiku" *nods* Dems! Now I'm home I can finally review this for you. Because we all know holidays are for doing nothing while pretending to be doing something. ...

Hey. =) Firstly, let me just say that I probably wouldn't have read this were you not in my group - fanfiction doesn't really float my boat. :wink: But it ...

Demi. Tosh. Girl. Review time: Mind splits the surface of lake I just think it's really odd how you have an article ahead of "surface" and not "lake". I think ...

I feel as if I should review the rewrite. It's my duty. ^^ Firstly, I disagree with CuteBalletDancer. You should use said a lot, and don't change that. It's essential. ...

Conrad! Have I actually read anything by you? *shrugs* Let's get typing. The rapid-fire whap whap whap of the I might be being overly picky, but I think that the ...

Hey Author! I'm Mark. 15, too. So let's see if I can help at all. ^^ Before I begin, just wanted to direct you to the rules . You gotta ...