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Heya! Firstly, in case you didn't know there's no need to put a capital letter at the start of a new line, only, as with prose, at the start of ...

Hey again, Who’s all going? "Who is all going?" sounds awkward, and doesn't make sense even in chat. How about just: "Who's going?" Late morning, I logged into MSN, conversation ...

Here I am! I probably just had the world’s most interesting and most horrible conversation. This would be better phrased as: "I probably just had the most interesting, yet worst ...

Hey! clothing, whites, blacks, greys, as This would be better as: "clothing - whites, blacks, greys - as". as all the drab colours of the world sat at her feet. ...

Heya! I agree with LivinginFantasy about the line breaks. In poetry, there are no rules aside from our standard punctuation, it can even be written in paragraphs! But we use ...

Hey, Gurgling noises escaping from her mouth. Lower-case 'G'. Only at the start of a new sentence or proper noun, as with prose. The sound of scraping reaches my ears, ...

Hi Yoha! This was a really nice poem, a great title. deemed to o young My muse has left me in the shallow end with someone I don't want. That ...

It's just too good to keep away from for more than two hours: deep lines to her face and dark shadows beneath her eyes. There are a lot of adjectives ...

Crawford? But that's my name! Anyhow, excellent choice: ‘Then it is to Time I shall turn .’ He turned I'm not sure whether the repetition was intention but I think ...

short sleeved This should be 'shortsleeve'. blood stained As before, one word. But he was being stubborn. This definitely weakens a very important moment, in my opinion just a one ...

I can't wait for this to come out! Then I can burn it! I don't understand why you are all against him. Name 5 specific things that he plagiarized and ...

Hi Eimear! I read another of your poems yesterday, so I thought I'd check out this one: My dear, you are my season, Your burning looks like days. Firstly, I'm ...

Hey, Dad was blatantly watching me from the kitchen window; however I had my back to him and refused to acknowledge him . Some more irritating repetition. Maybe: "however I ...

Hi Eimear! In my dreams late at night, I hear her talking to me. ‘London town may be grand, but it’s here you should be’ Firstly, full stop at the ...

Hi! I saw the third chapter to this so I thought I'd go through them and see what we have here: To be honest, I couldn't see any grammatical errors ...