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'Allo! I'm going to go with grammar first: Orson Welles , [comma] but me? This just adds a little emphasis, and makes the reader slow down, thinking. When the shadows ...

Heya ^ ^ Just a quick point: I've noticed that you've posted two pieces of your own work. YWS does ask that you do two reviews for every one that ...

1984, by George Orwell. I'm a little obsessed about this book at the moment, but it's simply incredible. Like, wow. And The Book Thief (Marcus Zusak) and The Lord of ...

OK, Moby Dick? I was so expecting that guy to turn into a whale. Anyway, to be unhelpful: a day shift as Blockbusters "as" = "at" and could still feel ...

^^ There is increasingly fewer people Should that be 'are'? and vibrant eyes that had not the dull glaze of a drug user. So, basically, she's not a druggie...? It ...

Heya Penguin (Attack)! I stink at poetry, so if my thoughts are of no real relevance, feel free to ignore them :) Lonely bones of old maids rumble into empty ...

Heya! Can I make your day too? I'll try not to do grammar, since I think it's been done :) Sarah said in a serious, half-scared voice. Why so? What ...

Hi Dragon! :) PREFACE It also illuminated the outer covering of the deep trench. A few things about this sentence. 1) Get rid of 'also'. By simpying putting in another ...

And Lord of the Rings... well. I know it's classic, too, but it's also awfully dull. I managed through the first book and halfway through the second one. That was ...

Heya, Sinister Jigster! curling up like dying worms being burned I like the simile, but it seems to me like you have too ideas being mixed up. When worms die, ...

Allo :) Thought I'd return the favour. Well, there's not a lot here but I'll do my best Maddie grimaced. So did Aiden. Try a different word, or go into ...

Hey Clo! Sorry I took my time getting back to this :) that focused specifically on that pink, thin-lipped smile That "specifically" just isn't doing a lot for that sentence ...

Aha, this is the only thing making me review these days. On the same accord, my best procrastination tool :) ‘Damn it all,’ he muttered, ‘damn it.’ I would rearrange ...

Seriously man, you're spoiling us. Anyhow, don't worry, I enjoy these reviews and I'm working on something at the moment which I might post soon, so what they heck :) ...

'Tis back! And be epic I shall. :wink: Just the nitpicks first: It was dark inside, even with the lights switched on. Right now, I don't know if it's because ...