Blank_Ink

There will be no noise tonight, Just the sweet nothings of your harmonic breath. These last two lines bother me. In and of themselves, they're very good. I wish I ...

Kind of reminds me of "10 Things I Hate About You", when she's actually reading the poem. Your rhyming really doesn't have a pattern. Some lines rhyme, while others don't. ...

I don't know if you'd just rather not use punctuation, or you're just lazy. But I know that in some pieces, not punctuating correctly is done on purpose. I myself ...

I love your descriptions of the boy. Do you ever just sit in a corner and observe people, write tidbits about their appearances and mannerisms? If you don't and you ...

The story has potential. I love the agony of it- as weird as that may sound. I do agree with Amelia's post. The best writers have the gift of making ...

I feel like it ended too soon. Also, the rhyming scheme, or lack there of, kind of had me confused. Was it a rhyming poem or not? There was no ...

I felt like the entire poem was leading up to a climax that didn't happen. I enjoyed all except the last two lines. I really do think it just ended ...

I actually really like it. It reminds me of a passage I read in a book one time, but for the life of me I have no idea what book, ...

I really love the section about Paris and Equal. Perhaps I'm interpreting it wrong, but it makes me think that, instead of seeing the big word, all this person does ...

It does sound more like a song. And, honestly, it's not something I haven't heard before. You should continue to revise it (hoping and assuming that you did that at ...

This poem actually made me think of my dad. I'm not sure if that's a good thing or not... There were some grammatical errors, but it kept me reading. My ...

I will admit that the rhyming kind of did me in. Also, the way the poem is blocked together makes me think it'll never ended, which I've read in other ...