Blackwood

I tried to writ it so that both the narrator and Tommy had negotive traits so that he reader would be made to pick sides.

Don't want to ask why you know that...

bb code doesn't work in the publishing center, you'll have to fix it manually.... And ibuprofen is painkiller... you did know that didn't you?

I found this quiet entertaining. Its well written. Just dropping by a comment here:P The best part about Vicky is her evilness.

Hmm yes. You may find it difficult to simulate the feeling of being a musician. For example it is more than likely that Marcus is very nervous but will not ...

I don't know why but the word mustard just sounded a fitting way to describe it...

Its taking a shower, lol. Snoink says so below.

Thank you very much. i am happy you found meaning it them. many people think that they lack meaning but when i wrote them I felt meaning myself despite their ...

Lol what?

Also if you want a preview of first person present tense I wrote something as an opening to a novel, but i think that in your case staying in third ...

If you change to past tense it will take way less editing than if you change to first person.

I know! Its the publishing centre. I didn't put it like that, no matter what i do I cant fix it..... Its driving me insane.

Good review bro, I hope I didn't repeat too much of it.

OHHH How did I miss that XD

Mhmm it was, and if you read it again you'd notice all my imagery has no visual annotations.