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Re: Lights: Chapter One
Howdy!! I like your writing style. You have a great foundation and a grasp of what you want to say. Personally the story starts off a little slow. The pacing ...
Mar 16, 2013 -
Re: Emerald Mangoes
Okie dokie, here we go. Firstly, Id like to point out that this is written with your own understandings and intentions and by no means shall i seek to discourage ...
Nov 27, 2012 -
Re: Chapter 1: Don't Say A Word
Howdy! Man, I really like this story. I particularly like the way you have paced the story. You creep across each moment and really allow the image to sink in ...
Nov 27, 2012 -
Re: Paper Bindings Prologue
Howdy!! wowzers I like this story, I do have some minor opinions but aside from that I sincerely like your writing style. The first paragraph is beautifully written and your ...
Nov 26, 2012 -
Re: Darling
This is good stuff!! Theres some great imagery that really reaches out and captures your imagination. Its got a nice pacing to it too, although I think some parts MAY, ...
Nov 26, 2012 -
Re: Red Rimmed: Prologue- rewritten
I really truly like your writing style, some really great imagery is used and it gives a sense of excitement. I did think some of the discriptions were boarder-lining cliche'. ...
Nov 26, 2012