BlackDove

no! this is terrifying! it was very chilling. The idea is original, as far as i know and you're wrong. your discription, action etc was very good! there are a ...

there are a few things you could do to improve this piece of writing. for example 1. you seem to start sentences a lot with "he" (he did this, he ...

this was very good. I enjoyed it from start to finish. though there were some little mistakes. "Before i could begin to stop myself"... Hmmm... this could sound a little ...

Not bad. A nice idea and i kinda liked it. Though there were some sentences that i thought were a little bit awkward and difficult to read. And the whole ...

Yep! That's right. 17 syllables makes a haiku. I used to write haiku's about butterflies. :lol: I'll sign your guest book. yours BlackDove

This isn't bad. :D You have good ideas and the characters are interesting. Some of the words were well chosen and i enjoyed it for the most part. Bu i ...