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God's Angle = God's Angel Common spelling error. I do it alot. Ok, let's get to some critquing! The odor grew so strong that I felt like I was going ...

Hey! This is way good! Is this the first chapter in that other one I read...the bookworm one? It has the same charactor. Anyway, this was way good. I loved ...

Hey! Paw, you are a fantastic writer! I haven't read very much of your writing, so I will be now. Every story I have read of yours has been really ...

Oh my gosh. I absolutely loved it! This was amazing! I could totally picture what was going on and stuff. Wow! Pawprint, this was by far the best you have ...

Oh...that's really creepy. He was growling at her! Freaky! Anyway, is lunch really after second period? That is really early for lunch. I loved the whole diolouge and stuff. It ...

Huh. Yeah, I thought this was very clever. I would never have written such a cool poem. Ok, let me tell you somethings you need to change. "fear keeps us ...

Cool. Makes us want to read more: "he asked in a texan accent" texan = Texan "which broke into millions of pieces on impact." I'm sure it didn't really break ...

Hey! This will really grab your reader's attention. I loved it. Prologues can be short. It doesn't matter. There was only one thing: "You will follow my story and my ...

Yeah! another great section! I really liked this, like last time, but the only that that bothers me is it goes by really fast, but that might just be cause ...

Oh, cool! I have to say that I really liked this. I just love the name Nightmare for the MC. It was fantastic. The first paragraph was WAY too tell-y. ...

wow..This is really getting intense and really good! Great job! There was only one thing that I noticed this time: Sometimes you say, "Christians'" when it should be "Christian's" Unless ...

Hey! Whoa! That was way cool! I loved it! The only thing that bugged me was that the whole scene when he/she? wakes up. It doesn't seem very realistic. What ...

Hey! Well, this was interesting. I didn't quite understand it all, but the last line left some mystery. Ok, I agree with Ginger: you need punctuation. A poem is about ...

Oh..this is really getting good, Kim! This is really great! I can't wait to read more. Only like a couple things to point out: "We are waiting on the pastor ...

When you were little you had a cubby house in the back of your yard. It sat prim and proper, These should be combined. Mr Teddy – and his accomplices ...